[Project-fallujah] Re: black box album by mozaz

robin&amparo robin_amparo at tiscali.co.uk
Mon Dec 6 19:06:30 GMT 2004



What i like most in this album-book is its kind of unstructured structure...
well done, mr "eat more fruit" (acting as a "leit motif": repeated word, 
phrase in a literary work, from German "leading motive")

Absence or "original" use of punctuation, capitalization...

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PS: This is just a first intake of the album-book-collection-black box 
which opens to unexpected nature : nature, flowers, woodlands, very 
powerful in their contrast to sadness, depression of the narrator (at 
least in the more "bio-graphical" narrative)...and the chilliness of 
urban pictures.
Some biblio references would highlight original insights of this 
album-book-collection.
A comment (if the author(s) could forgive such bluntness by any 
passer-bye reader) on the over abundance of trademarks or brandnames( 
also in the more "bio-graphical" short story) ...But how would you 
otherwise name a "res" environment, dominated by things, objects, 
devices, ads and consumerism? thus creating a vacuum, soul-emptiness 
(three ladder steps higher and you are on a mystic path my friend): the 
dark night of the soul and st. john of the cross (this could be a biblio 
reference, another perhaps naked lunch, leonard cohen - quoted by 
narrator  )...
Obviously this would make it look more "academic" but would good on a 
foreword (or an afterword) signed by another or by yourself.

http://19896.lowtech.org/nine/oneindex.html

The story of the goldfish i have just read: very "beautiful", moving & 
tender.

Fine work, mr. mozaz (any other "alter egos"/ co-authors?)

______

By the way, if not yet written, a short story narrated or told by 
david's former lover (gay or not gay) could easily turn into a best 
seller! (haven't you thought about it?).

@mparo, the
reviewed reviewer




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